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John Bramwell the Ultimate Hypnotist

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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-27-2018
01:16 AM ET (US)
Hey so we're a bit lost on where to take John's backstory in Chs 4 and 5 (kind of been playing by ear/using what you gave us)

We want a big payoff to happen that makes John decide everyone needs to be punished, but we don't know what

To be clear, we're not going for tragic backstory (we know you don't want that). But we are kind of going for dramatic/shocking backstory
Edited 03-27-2018 01:53 AM
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-18-2018
09:57 AM ET (US)
I'll be posting this soon, but if there's any edits you like I can put them in after the fact
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-18-2018
08:57 AM ET (US)
Here's the next John backstory post planned:

[spoiler=Prelude]
“[url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Mf4sotXFulE]First day of school, huh?”[/url] John muttered. “Welp, no point in going to classes. May as well see if there’s anyone interesting around.”

The first place he walked into was the cafeteria for breakfast. There was only one person in line--a normal looking kid with brown hair and brown eyes. John cut in front of him.

“Hey, man! What’s the big idea?”

John turned towards him. “Do you know who I am?”

“I don’t care if you’re the crown prince of Antegria, you can’t cut in front of people like that!”

John pulled out his pocket watch. “I’m the Ultimate Hypnotist, you know? Even if you don’t want me to, I can have it my way.”

The boy turned back to his tray. “This school….”

“So what are you here for?”

“I’m learning to be an actor!” The boy beamed. He was clearly puffing up his pride though, there was sadness in his inflection.

“That’s nice.” John smirked. “I hope you’re not leaving behind anything too important.”

“I uh…what?” The boy was caught off-guard.

“I’m not hungry.” John decided. “You can have my place in line.”

He walked out into the hall and immediately bumped into someone. “Watch it, you imbecile!”

The boy seemed a bit uncaring towards things. All he did in response to John was light a cigarette and shoot him a quizzical look. “My bad.”

“Who the hell do you think you are?”

“[url=[url=https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=RObKagk9hec]I’m Dallas.[/url]”

“Dallas, uh? Lemme guess, PI?”

Dallas smirked. “Not bad.”

Something about the boy bothered John. No...it infuriated him. John grit his teeth and decided to pursue the conversation no further.

He walks into an empty classroom where a lone girl is. She wears a pink dress, and looks about as innocent as a butterfly. “Oi, who are you?” John asked, almost sounding like a command.

“Ah, me?” She did a small curtsy. “I’m...Penelope Reed...the Ultimate Humanitarian heeheeee…”

John was confused. Nothing said was that funny. “Do you know who I am?” He pulled out his pocket watch. This should be amusing.

“N-No, I don’t. But...I can tell you’re different from the other classmates here.”

“Oh, is that so?”

“Yeah. Something about you...it gives me chills. I better [i]watch[/i] out, you know?”

John rolled his eyes and put his watch away. “You amuse me.” He had no smile on his face when he said it.

“You’re probably a….hypnotherapist, right?”

“Ha! Close, but I am good at reading people.” Now he did smile. “Really though, I don’t think any of you have worthwhile talents. I’m leagues above all of you.”

“Oh wow. I’ve never….met someone with so much...confidence in himself.”

“I can feel it in you too.” John was beginning to get bored of this conversation as well. Something about her...she wasn’t as innocent as she appeared. “Whatever. I’m leaving.”

“Hey, I never got your name!”

John headed towards his talent lab, to find a woman he had met at the beginning of the day standing in front of it. “Mr. Bramwell! What the hell are you doing You haven’t been doing any work all day.”

He quickly pulled out his pocket watch and swung it in front of her. “Don’t worry about it, Mrs. Applebottom.”

“Ah, right. Of course.”

“Also, I’m gonna need a hall pass. One that doesn’t expire.”

“I’ll get right on it.” She blinked out of the trance, seeming a bit confused. “Anyway, how was your first day of school?”

“I hate the first day of school.” John grumbled. “Everyone’s all friendly and shit. It’s so fake. It disgusts me.”
[/spoiler]
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-14-2018
08:43 AM ET (US)
https://www.quicktopic.com/52/H/A28n3ct9xSEK

https://www.quicktopic.com/52/H/UN6PrUR2jgPVC
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SiRReN
03-13-2018
10:11 PM ET (US)
We need some antagonism I'm there haha
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-13-2018
08:29 PM ET (US)
They’re just waiting for the trial since they know it’s coming soon
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SiRReN
03-13-2018
06:57 PM ET (US)
What happened, no one is posting much lately
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SiRReN
03-09-2018
08:56 AM ET (US)
Dale wants to see my bloody corpse :0
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
09:28 PM ET (US)
They've brought up being free of the mastermind dies a few times now - I can't wait to see what you have in store for why they can't leave
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
01:52 PM ET (US)
Ooooh, oooh! Lyla and Momo will kill him at least. Let's see if anyone else joins them
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
01:38 PM ET (US)
Mostly just have him egg them on. He'd see it as the ultimate proof that they're below him if they kill him, so he'd exalt in feeling justified.
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-08-2018
01:01 PM ET (US)
Sure thing

Do you have any particular last words you want him to say while getting killed?
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
12:37 PM ET (US)
If they all leave John down there, can the last thing he shouts to them be

"You may not cave to your baseness today, but you will. You will!"
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
10:17 AM ET (US)
I love how the scene you just posted turned out
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SiRReN
03-08-2018
09:48 AM ET (US)
https://coloradopeakpolitics.com/wp-conten...c90be/899381475.jpg

I'm glad everyone liked him - I was really worried I would go too far with him.
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JesusMonroePerson was signed in when posted
03-08-2018
09:31 AM ET (US)
Glad to hear it. Everybody loved John, and are surprised to see him go so early
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