Who is your intended audience? From your use of terminology (e.g., content-cnetric context," "multi-sensory context") it appears that you are aiming for a fairly sophisticated audience already familiar with online communiciation issues.

If this is so, I wonder if the advice that follows is helpful. Could experienced online communicators be expected to already know these things? Conversely, if your intended audience is the inexperienced online communicator, then I think your introductory paragraphs should be more simple and explanatory.

Hi Nancy

You got the jump on me. I am currently in the processes of starting a real online community with Dianne Renton, the woman from our Voluntary Sector Initiative. So far as we see it, I may be writing articles to provoke an open membership into posting their comments on diverse issues of concern, and completing related surveys and polls.

QuickTopic's appearance is timely inspiration. Wish I knew about it when I initiated the C4C Initiative. Anyways, expect my appearance here in QuickTopic soon, as well as a more formal announcement at onelinefacilitation soon (I hope ;)

As a writer with a thousand points to be made, that is a constant challenge to me.

Have I made my point? Does it flow with what has already been said, or about to be said? Is the point better made else where in the essay? Does it leave room for my readers to formulate their own thoughts, or provoke them into thinking?

Reflection on the wonderful gift of everyone's comments.

Wow, this is amazing to me. I am not a "writer." I write to share an idea or pass along something. Having your collective help to both clarify, amplify and edit is an amazing and GENEROUS thing. THANK YOU!

(and keep em coming!)

Mary, great suggestions (both content and editing. Dang, I need an editor!) Thank you.

Good clarification. I've had people tell me everything from "a picture was the difference that made the difference" to "NO PICTURES." Good catch to qualify that.

Another idea... sometimes I read threads I need to more fully attend to aloud in an attempt to capture the auditory learning bit of my brain. It does help me pick up on nuances that otherwise might escape me.

... and yet another, although this adds yet more time and space and may not be appropriate for this piece... I also take a walk around the block while considering a thread and my response to it. It seems to help, especially if the participants are getting heated with one another (not sure why).

"Roll-your-own" here looks like an adjective, but I think you mean it as a verb. It's clever, at any rate. How 'bout "Roll your own" without the hyphens...???

I like the introduction to the idea of this piece here and found myself engaged in thinking about it and wanting to read more.

Not crazy about the use of the word "Between" here... it appears to imply a usage in time here (although it could also be a spatial meaning). Perhaps something like "because of" instead... however, I do like the "spark fades" metaphor. Perhaps you can play with that a bit.

Hi, Nancy. I'm curious why you asked if we've seen their picture. I've worked with a quite competent person in a prior situation who said he'd rebel if he was asked to post his picture online. He found online to be one of the few spaces where people's ideas weren't judged by the looks of their faces.

His concern was that faces and shirts/ties/whatever tend to give away rank and role, and he was glad to simply be heard.

Dang, it was you Eric. I think I have not had sufficient chocolate for the day. Edgar was also posting below. Mamma mia, has anyone seen my brain sitting around someplace? Please tell it to come home!

Edgar????


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Oops, I meant Edgar. Too many "E's" before my morning tea!

This is great! For another example of an editing process (thank you Eric) check out http://www.quicktopic.com/6/D/5M5Yk8VwLig2ApX2ZPBJ.html

It is very easy to respond too quickly when using an email client to monitor a forum such as online facilitation. I find that the web interface helps me establish context more easily.

With Yahoo!Groups, there is an option on the web interface to view postings by thread instead of the default, date sort. Before responding, it is really useful to look over the entire thread to make sure that someone else hasn't already said EXACTLY what you are planning to say. Your advice "take your fingers... off the keyboard" is sage advice. It might help the article if you even provided a little example here.

Hi Nancy:
You have a little typo here.....

"Roll-you-own"... shld be "Roll-your-own"..