now caught up and also asked a couple of writer friends to read ur story.

i think this is very heart felt story, you have good writing skills and I'm impressed but u miss out on typos, I'm dyslexic so i pick up on that, typos on here i don't worry about.

your story touched my heart and i will probably re read it as i prefer fantasy/sci-fi

u may get a note from Papa Mike (Miguel Sanchez) he is a prolific author on nifty so u can look @ his writing style he may not help but im sure he knows some1 that can