Chapter 3 read... What the Kid said about studying the dampening field made me think... Eternity... Alive... Together... Wow, it's just overwhelming.

Oh, and the quote, "These pheremones are a public menace." I giggled. "We could take out an army, just by making
out!" was very amusing... Do it... I think that would be a fun scene. Destroy an army with them making out ^^ *cackles gleefully* Oh, and I do so hope that more shall be seen of the government lady person. Another strong female character would be nice to balance out the male tones. (feminist side of me acting up as usual)

I just spent my entire evening reading the entire posted story. Fantastic work. Very good mixture of the plot driven Sci-Fi with the erotic elements and making them integrate and support one another. Also very nice mythology. One could see you branching out into a historic setting in your next "book".

A few bits of creative criticism: Keep it fresh to those well versed in Sci-Fi & Fantasy by not resorting to well-known formulaic writings. The ending of the first book was a little too similar to Rice's climax of Queen of the Damned. Also, the prophecy angle could be clarified a bit.

Then again, these have now become classics because they are so successful. While they are recognizable, you have successfully incorporated them as your own.

A suggestion....I would enjoy seeing a return from they guy they met in the airport when Julian was disguised as "grandpa". He seemed to have an instant connection with Julian that could be explored. Julian did seem to want to aid this person to remove the budding programming. There are many avenues visible within Dark Legacy where this character could be reincorporated and fleshed out.

Regardless, thanks for the fantastic evening of reading. I can't wait for the next installment.

Wow Tangent...all in one night? Damn I'm good, [evil laughter]...

But seriously thanks for the thoughts. Although...Queen of the Damned? Seriously? Is the book different from the movie? I avoided the book (though I love the rest of the Vampire Chronicles) because I absolutely HATED the movie...I'll have to go back and check on that to see if I've somehow been corrupted...er...I mean influenced...by that blatantly-heterosexualized, punk-vamp, bloodsuckers-from-hell, two-dimensional atrocity...

Prophecy: I'm trying to decide what to do with this. There are two possible applications of the words of the prophecy...I can let them assume the "better" meaning and be surprised, or I can just go with the better meaning..

Airport Guy: Yeah...been toying with bringing him back. And also the hooker who donated blood to Julian towards the end of the first book. They're going to be pawns in this game, still figuring out exactly how...

Oh yeah, Brolem, Rhiana is definitely going to be a major character in this book, never fear :)

PD!

Just read your Symbiota Sapiens story. Started Thursday before bed and finished it this afternoon. What a ride!
 
Very yummy fantasy stuff.

The funnest gay romance I've ever read.

I read the first few paragraphs of Dark Legacy and I'm glad you decided to switch the narrative to Julian in the first person. It'll open up some intersting fresh new stuff.

I have some ideas/comments I'll email you once I transcribe tehm onto keyboard, but I want to give kudos for creating such a fun, rich and somehwat original world of myth and adventure. Gay culture needs this like much needed oxygen.

It sinks in through the sexual and spiritual pores.

Keep it pouring &, uh, coming ;-P

<SLURP, sigh...>

Hello! i just spend my entire day reading this story! i loved every part of it. Kudos to you! I was just wondering if there was a time frame on the next part?

Hey sorry I haven't updated in a while. Been doing a bit of traveling this summer.

I've got chapter three just about ready to go, and I'm back to school the start of september (hopefully that will mean writing will be back as a part of my routine, as opposed to meaning I'm too busy with school).

Just finsihed your story and am craving more!!! wonderful job and i look forward to your future work....thanks for the time.

Chapter 4 of Dark Legacy is now up. There's a rather disturbing part at the beginning, I've tried my best to handle it tastefully.

*shudders* That beginning part made me shudder with pain. It creeped me out a lot and made me want to blast autonoid bits into oblivion.

Yeah, I really want to see the girl that donated blood to Julian. Since he has some of her blood in him, she could be connected in somehow. Blood, vampires... Yum...

She could be a metaphysical fag hag! When autonoids attack, she comes in with magical fag hag powers seducing the autonoids into submission! I don't know, something terribly outrageous and zany fits my perception. Perhaps helping them control themselves?

And I really think the boys are missing some aspect of the problem. They need a female though processor in the mix.

Ehm... I've changed my mind. I don't think I want to be an autonoid anymore. Using Roberto like that was evil, and I'm rather surprised that they did what they did to Danny. He could have died, and I didn't think they would do that to one of their own. Either it must be really, really important for them to control the Supreme Court, or they are very confident that they would be able to replace any autonoid that dies - that they can handle the implants and redeploy them.

Anyway, with the Taskforce involved like this... Things could get interesting :-)

The autonoid collective operates on a twisted combination of extreme socialist and extreme utilitarian philosophies. So giving Roberto some major psychological baggage, and landing Danny in the hospital for a year, in exchange for one out of nine Supreme Court Justices in the pocket is an easily calculated "net gain" for all the 300,000 or so autonoids out there.

Oh, and as for the risk to Danny...remember the collective has a massive amount of computing power between them...I think they calculated the physics of that accident down to the last bit of flying glass.

Whoa...metaphysical fag hag? That sounds like a song title or something. No, she'll be entering the picture soon now but there's no weird connection or anything - just the plain old consequences/benefits that come from having come into contact with two guys who are up to their eyeballs in intrigue...aside from the Digital Prophecies, I'm keeping this series very "un-mystical".

Calculating the physics of the accident "down to the last bit of flying glass"? No, I don't think so. That problem wouldn't be stable. It would be extremely sensitive to small changes in the initial conditions. I don't think the autonoids have sensors anywhere near sensitive enough to provide the information and accuracy needed to accomplish such a feat. I doubt even the Guardians would be able to.

They might be able to calculate the actions that give Danny the best chances, but they wouldn't be able to predict exactly what would be happening to him. Had they had some bad luck, they might well have killed him.

Okay...I was exaggerating about the glass. but they can calculate velocity, the friction of the tires, the trajectories of all the vehicles involved, and the strength of the limo's frame and how it will crumple as it absorbs the impact on the drivers side, etc. Stuntmen and special effects experts set up collisions with reasonably precise results all the time, without the benefit of all that computing power.

This collision was really just a much more lethal application of the same technique Jeremey used at the airport, when he collided the van with the baggage cart so the motor would be damaged in a certain way.

Hope things going well. ^^

I can't wait to see how the two manage to keep from having the whole immortal society from wanting to wring their necks.

I really think Damion is going to be homophobic. Considering the time and place he comes from, despite having been an Attachment, i think he hates Jermey and Julian on many levels. He's not open about it because he knows they could kill him without much thought. I'd like to see him change his line of thinking, but I sincerely doubt it. To quote Rom: "Humans haven't changed as much over the years as they think they have." And considering that Damion is still fairly young, compared to the rest of the Guardians, he's much more likely to still hold onto prejudices, even more since he no longer has the same status as the others. Personally, I think it would weaken the plot and Damion's character development if he wasn't homophobic, or at least still resented the brothers. Don't get me wrong, I'm all about redemption and all that, but people don't change that quickly.

Hey!
It's been awfully quiet here lately, what's going on?