Edited by author 19-05-2005 14:31
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Here is my essay. What do you think? :-)

The diagram is about the pollution. Firstly manufacturing process produces pollution from factories in form of sulphur and nitrogen. These pollutions form clouds, which are blown by the wind from factories towards other areas. The rain that falls from these clouds contaminates the sulphur and nitrogen and is known as acid rain. When rain falls on the vegetation below the pollutants in acid rain poison the trees and plants, which then die. Thus pollution created by factories in one area can damage and even destroy environment in an area many miles away. We must to do all we can to stop pollution because it is bad for the environment.

Edited by author 19-05-2005 15:13
An interesting essay Krzysztof, which is generally well structured and in a logical order. Are you sure the film was just about pollution in general? Be careful with articles 'a' and 'the'. Are opinions allowed in this type of essay? What does anyone else think?

Here are my writing rules. What do you think?
1. Always check the word form.
2. Check for correctly use of "a" and "the"
3. Start names of things with a capital letter
4. Don't forget "s" on verbs for he/she/it
5. Propositions!! "On Wednesday" "At the weekend"

Thanks
Juan, Spain

Edited by author 08-03-2006 14:27
This is my writing task. I have seen a water cycle on this website and write some lines about that cycle. If there are mistakes then please inform me. My email address is qaisarprince@hotmail.com



this chart shows us the water cycle. It shows that how water is converted into the clouds with the help of sunshine. then the wind moves the clouds to the other higher areas. In that areas clouds causes the rain and the rain water downstreamed back into the sea.

The diagram is about the water cycle. Firstly, the water in the sea evaporates under the sunshine. During evaporation, water vapour is formed and the invisible water vapor rises to the air up to the sky. As the temperature in the sky is very low, the water vapour is cooled down and forms clouds. The wind carries the cloud to the other place. While the cloud cool down, it condenses and cause raining. the rain drops will flow downstream by the river. Finally, the rain drops flow back to the sea again. To sum up, water can helps to maintain the ecosystem. Thus, its is very important to our life.

HI I am Kathy who wrote the message below on 11.6.2006 at 08:48. My email is ymf888@hgcbroadband.com. Pl give me some advices and suggestion. Thanks

Hi Kathy,

Generally a good essay. You have described the process well. There are a few points for you to think about.

Third person s verb endings?
What do you mean by 'the other place'?
Are you sure you mean 'by the river'?

Try making a few changes and posting again
Good luck with your IELTS

the diagram is about water cycle.The first step of this prossesis the seas or oceans were evaprated by the heat of the sun.After that the water vapour rises up to the sky and makes clouds after the vapour cools.then the clouds were blowen by the wind.

the digram is about water cycle.first the water is evaporated by the heat of the sun.then water vapour inspissates in cold atmosphere to become clouds. after that the cooled clouds further cuasing rain mostly oon the peak of the mountain.the wather then, is carried downstream by the river wich flows into the sea then vapourates again to make the cycle of the water.

The diagram illustrates the constant circle of the water.
 When the sun shines and heats the sea, then the water drops invisible evaporate from the sea. Those invisible water drops cools and forms clouds, which are blowed by the wind from the sea. Clouds cools further causing the rain, that falls down to earth, forming streams. The water carried downstream form the lakes, then the water stream forms rivers, that flows into the sea. And the process starts all over angain.

Edited by author 10-11-2006 09:14
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Working of water cycle consists of three stages.the first stage is evaporation,by which water is evaporated and later get condensed in clouds in the second stage.The final stage is the rain which happens after condensation and get back to earth.

conclusion:

This water cycling is a great phenomenon which helps all living things for the survival of existence in earth.
-areef.

hi please make some corrections about my essay. thanks

Hi can anyone give some comments about my essays?

The diagram illustrates how the water cycle works. Evaporation takes place from the water surface on the sea which then turns to some invisible water vapour. Such water vapour will be blown by the wind and cooled down forming clouds. After some time, furthing cooling of clouds would cause raining. When the rain falls down on the hillside, water will be carried downward to the river and finally river will flow back into the sea and so it marks the end of the water cycle.